Hello everyone, it's been a while since I wrote the last post on IELTS Writing Task 1. Today, we are going to discuss a pie chart, and this time I will try to make both blog post and video tutorial at the same time, as I have promised. I realize some of you are probably the auditory type of learners so listening to an explanation may work better for you than just reading my post. For the video tutorial, you can click the link at the end of this post. Now, let's begin today's discussion by looking at sample chart below.
Paragraph 1 (Overview)
Now, we are going to start making an introductory paragraph, or more commonly known as overview, by introducing the chart, paraphrasing the original title and explaining the major trend. Firstly, we are going to introduce the pie chart simply by writing the pie chart presents [...]. Secondly, we are going to paraphrase the original title shown in the picture. This could be challenging for some people, but it won't be much of a burden if we start small. For today's practice, we can do the paraphrasing word by word or phrase by phrase, so let's try doing it like this:
- The Number of = The Percentage of
- Proficient = Fluent (in this case, I'll change it to fluently)
- Various = Different
It's hardly possible to replace the rest of the words so instead of paraphrasing them, let's just change the sentence structure a little bit. The title will be like this:
The pie chart presents the percentage of students in high school who fluently speak Spanish, German, Mandarin and Arabic.
Writing Pro Tips
Sometimes it is almost impossible to find the equivalent of certain English words. In this case, we can still paraphrase a sentence by changing its structure. To do this, you need to have good grammatical knowledge and skill. It could be difficult at first but hey, it is not impossible to learn right? I simply change the sentence by adding an Adjective Clause to paraphrase the sentence above and mention the languages one by one instead writing them as foreign languages. I think, it looks pretty good already. It's simple, but it will do.
Before we continue to the second paragraph, we can explain the major trends shown in the chart. Let's say, I am going to divide the parapgraph based on the fact that the majority of female students speak Spanish and there is a nearly equal proportion of male students who are fluent in Spanish, Germany, Mandarin and Arabic. So, the sentence will be like this:
The chart shows that the majority of female students speak Spanish proficiently and there is a nearly equal proportion of the number of male students who are fluent in Spanish, Germany, Mandarin and Arabic
That's it. We already have our first paragraph of the IELTS Writing Task 1, which looks pretty much like this:
The pie chart presents the percentage of students in high school who fluently speak Spanish, German, Mandarin and Arabic. The chart shows that the majority of female students speak Spanish proficiently and there is a nearly equal proportion of male students who are fluent in those foreign languages.
Paragraph 2 (Detailed Information)
Now that we have done the first paragraph, we are going to continue with the detailed information about female's language proficiency, as stated in the major trend that we have written before. The first information that we write in our paragraph 2 is the fact that the majority of female students are proficient in Spanish. Then, we can explain that a significant number of female students are also fluent in German. After that, we can explain the rest of the information. We can write paragraph 2 like this:
To begin, the first pie chart indicates that nearly half of female students are fluent in Spanish. Meanwhile, one-third of female students can speak German fluently. It is apparent that Mandarin has the least percentage of female speakers, while the number of females speaking Arabic is just a little above 10%. The percentage of female students with high proficiency in Arabic and Mandarin is considerably lower than that of male students'.
Paragraph 3 (Detailed Information)
Okay, we're almost done with our IELTS Writing Task 1. Now, we just need to explain the second pie chart that presents information about language proficiency in male students. There are several points that are important to note, and we better include them in our writing.
We can write paragraph 3 like this:
Interestingly, there are more male students who are fluent in Mandarin and Arabic, which together make up almost half of the male student population. It is also important to note that language proficiency is more equally distributed in the male population. Nearly one-third of the male students can speak German well, while the number of males who can speak Spanish is a little below 25%.
Writing Pro Tips
We can use different ways of explaining number and actually, we better use number, percentage, and fraction to make our writing less repetitive. Do not use percentage over and over again because it will not help us get high score for vocabulary range.
- You can write half of the students insead of 50%
- You can write a little below 25% instead of 23%
- You can also say one in five students can speak Arabic, instead of one-fifth or worse, 20%
After we've gone through all the process, our whole Writing Task 1 above will look like this:
The pie chart presents the percentage of students in high school who fluently speak Spanish, German, Mandarin and Arabic. The chart shows that the majority of female students speak Spanish proficiently and there is a nearly equal proportion of male students who are fluent in those foreign languages.
To begin, the first pie chart indicates that nearly half of female students are fluent in Spanish. Meanwhile, one-third of female students can speak German fluently. It is apparent that Mandarin has the least percentage of female speakers, while the number of females speaking Arabic is just a little above 10%. The percentage of female students with high proficiency in Arabic and Mandarin is considerably lower than that of male students'.
Interestingly, there are more male students who are fluent in Mandarin and Arabic, which together make up almost half of the male student population. It is also important to note that language proficiency is more equally distributed in the male population. Nearly one-third of the male students can speak German well, while the number of males who can speak Spanish is a little below 25%.
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